SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR STUDENTS AT UNIVERSITY TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN TO LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. OTHERS THINK STUDENTS SHOULD NOT STUDY AT UNIVERSITIES THAT ARE FAR FROM THEIR HOMETOWNS. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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No matter what they say, university

life

is significant for every

person especially

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person, especially

for making it a bad or good habit. Nowadays, many people argue that the best option for

collage

the body of faculty and students of a college

college

students is living

long distance

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long distances

a long distance

from

home

than living at parent’s

home

with them while the other crowd thinks oppositely.

For

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From

perspective I

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perspective, I

strongly agree with

first statement

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the first statement

because of providing independent and teamwork. In despite of living far away from

home

seems like

frightening

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a frightening

, it has a lot of advantages

such

as independent and

also

it helps to overcome certain responsibilities. By reason of that you have to do everything on your own

such

as if you don’t know cooking you should improve your bakery abilities.

However you

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However, you

’re in charge of your cleaning and your bills. In

this

way you could learn to take responsibility for your own

life

Besides

instead

of living

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parent’s

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the parent’s home, you

the parent’s home you

a parent’s home you

home

you would prefer dormitories. It could create

environment

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an environment

environments

where students from different walk of

life

and cultures gather and interact on a daily basis. In other word,

this

multicultural understanding

provide

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provides

live and study together with different type of students. In

this

way your work lives and careers could be better than before.

On the other hand

, students who live apart from their family could be

suffered

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suffering

from loneliness due to not to find friends.

Although

it is a highly significant, governments and universities give emotional and financial support to students. In conclusion, I think while living with parents seems like comfortable, university

life

in dormitory or your own house supplies awareness of some new abilities and responsibilities.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR STUDENTS AT UNIVERSITY TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN TO LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. OTHERS THINK STUDENTS SHOULD NOT STUDY AT UNIVERSITIES THAT ARE FAR FROM THEIR HOMETOWNS. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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