SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR STUDENTS AT UNIVERSITY TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN TO LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. OTHERS THINK STUDENTS SHOULD NOT STUDY AT UNIVERSITIES THAT ARE FAR FROM THEIR HOMETOWNS. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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No matter what they say, university

life

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is significant for every

person especially

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person, especially

for making it a bad or good habit. Nowadays, many people argue that the best option for

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the body of faculty and students of a college

college

students is living

long distance

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long distances

a long distance

from

home

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than living at parent’s

home

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with them while the other crowd thinks oppositely.

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From

perspective I

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perspective, I

strongly agree with

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first statement

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the first statement

because of providing independent and teamwork. In despite of living far away from

home

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seems like

frightening

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a frightening

, it has a lot of advantages

such

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as independent and

also

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it helps to overcome certain responsibilities. By reason of that you have to do everything on your own

such

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as if you don’t know cooking you should improve your bakery abilities.

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However you

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’re in charge of your cleaning and your bills. In

this

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way you could learn to take responsibility for your own

life

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instead

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of living

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parent’s

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the parent’s home, you

the parent’s home you

a parent’s home you

home

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you would prefer dormitories. It could create

environment

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an environment

environments

where students from different walk of

life

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and cultures gather and interact on a daily basis. In other word,

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multicultural understanding

provide

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provides

live and study together with different type of students. In

this

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way your work lives and careers could be better than before.

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, students who live apart from their family could be

suffered

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suffering

from loneliness due to not to find friends.

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it is a highly significant, governments and universities give emotional and financial support to students. In conclusion, I think while living with parents seems like comfortable, university

life

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in dormitory or your own house supplies awareness of some new abilities and responsibilities.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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267 words

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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR STUDENTS AT UNIVERSITY TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN TO LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. OTHERS THINK STUDENTS SHOULD NOT STUDY AT UNIVERSITIES THAT ARE FAR FROM THEIR HOMETOWNS. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What problems does this cause? Can you suggest some solutions to this issue?

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