some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at school. to what extent do the advantages outweighs disadvantages

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It is considered by some educational
profrssers
the highest ranking position for a university academic
professors
think that
students
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student
exchange to
oversea
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may have some benefits for them.
This
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esay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
assay
will gather
elborate
marked by complexity and richness of detail
elaborate
about
the advantages
thus
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will from a logical
conculsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
connection
. As we all know, Hong
kong
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Kong
students most busy with academic, they not only join face of a lot of test or exam, but
also
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need to
participat
share in something
participate
in
wind variety
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a wind variety
of
totuies
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
duties
tortures
tattoos
.
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Therefore Hong
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Therefore, Hong
Kong students do not have enough time to relax or take a break, they feel more tired, busy, and pressure of their
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study
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student
life.
few
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Few
students due to academic stress suffer from depression and anxiety.
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How even
,
students
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student
exchange to
oversea
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, it may reduce their pressure and enjoy
to
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studying
study
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, because
most
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the most oversea school value
oversea
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school value of relaxing to
study
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and establish Academic is not
only method
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the only method
to success.
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for
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For
example, students
are
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are studying
study
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at least 4 hours in the morning, after lunch break, they can join different activities or outdoor activities to find their hobby or interest until the end of the daily
scudual
plan for an activity or event
schedule
.
it
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It
is establish
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is established
establishes
relax and interesting atmosphere to encourage students does not be
afriad
filled with fear or apprehension
afraid
to
study
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, which is fun. In addiction,
oversea
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school may focus on more useful English and
dailylife
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daily life
English more than Academic English so that it may easy to handle and feel
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
of their
study
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.
On the other hand
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, students rare speck English on regularly in Hong Kong, they most reply to
speck
express in speech
speak
Cantonese as their
first
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lanuage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
so that if they need to communicate with
oversea
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people, it may difficult to have a
conversetion
the use of speech for informal exchange of views or ideas or information etc.
conversation
. If students exchange to
oversea
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such
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as
british
of or relating to or characteristic of Great Britain or its people or culture
British
burritos
and England, it may build up students English language, because English is the
first
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lanuage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
in local,
also
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the street, even menus in the restaurant is English, it can lead students read more, speck more in the
oversea
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that can boost students vocabulary and fluency
to
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in
communication with each other. It can build up all aspect
skills including
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skills, including
Writing, reading, Listening and Specking. To sum up, stud
ents exc
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hand
e to
watch and direct
oversee
oversea
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school may bring sev
eral be
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benefits
nefit to them
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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