Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #hobby

The charts illustrate the average rates of sodium, saturated fat and added

sugar

in daily meals consumed by Americans. Overall, Sodium and added

sugar

contributed the most on dinner meal, while the added

sugar

shows the most significant portion in snacks.

First

of all, sodium and saturated fat were the biggest nutrients consumed at dinner meals which accounted for 43 % and 37 % in the whole typical daily meals.

In contrast

, the added

sugar

contains in snacks was a significant part of the nutrient that consumed in the morning as a breakfast which is was 42%. Breakfast meal has the smallest segment of saturated fat and added

sugar

by only made up to 16 %.

Furthermore

, accounted for 26% and 21% of saturated fat contained in the typical lunch meal and snack consumed by USA people.

Also

, the Added

sugar

was at 19% and 23% in lunch meal and snack.

Last but not least

Suggestion

The last but not least

, the Sodium nutrients contained

Suggestion

with

breakfast and snacks are the same which 14% of the total meals consumed in a whole day.

Submitted by Nida Nafila on Wed Jun 24 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

177 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

sense of accomplishment
overcoming obstacles
gratifying
continuous source of enjoyment
relaxing activities
unwind and de-stress
counterproductive
mental break
subjective
personal preference

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is said that enlistment should go to school until they are 18 years old. This writer agrees with this statement as they will obtain enough knowledge to get a better job and will become more respected by society.
4.5
band
Some students take a year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to work or to travel. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
There has been considerable debate to whether a gap year is beneficial to students who may choose to find a job or go on an excursion instead of further accomplishing within their specialities. Which could be detrimental to how they succeed within their field. In this essay I will discuss both the merit and demerit of this notion and shed a light on the preference for the later.
6.5
band
There is a big number of people who wish to live in big cities. Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer
Living in the big cities could be a big dream for the vast majority of people, while some of them stand opposite this idea. This essay will try to identify the positive and negative side of this topic.
6
band
The world is changing rapidly, working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the causes for the changes and give suggestions how people should prepare for work in the future.
The world is changing very fast, working conditions today are not equal to before, and employees no longer rely on taking one job for life. In my opinion, people often have more than one job because they want to have the extra money to fulfil their needs, it can be for primary stuff, the cost of travelling and personal rewards, or paying the house's cash loan. The employee must prepare their skill set to compete in this competitive era, it is the only suggestion for them to survive.
5.5
band
In many countries, the number of obese children is increasing rapidly, and many people believe that the government is responsible for this alarming problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In many countries, the number of obese children is increasing rapidly, many people believe that the government is responsible for this alarming problem. I find that this is not an entirely accurate opinion. Although the government is responsible for the problem of overweight in children, the key is still parental supervision and proper education from schools.

Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some students take a year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to work or to travel. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

There is a big number of people who wish to live in big cities. Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in big cities. Include reasons and any relevant examples to support your answer

The world is changing rapidly, working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the causes for the changes and give suggestions how people should prepare for work in the future.

In many countries, the number of obese children is increasing rapidly, and many people believe that the government is responsible for this alarming problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?