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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Disscus both view and give your opinion.

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In the 21st century, there are two main types of
city
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:
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:
horizontal
city
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 with
houses close the
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houses close to the
 ground and
vertical
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the vertical city
city
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 with multi-storey houses. While some people consider better provision of horizontal
city
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 is the best choice,
Iam
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
am
 of opinion that
verticl
at right angles to the plane of the horizon or a base line
vertical
city
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 as a great solution. On the one hand
,
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,
it
is believe
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is believed
 that
aliving
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a living
 in horizontal is greatest
.
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.
 A
conuncing
causing one to believe the truth of something
convincing
 explanation is that living in
ground floor
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the ground floor
 is safer. The natural disaster problems
such
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 as storm, earthquake
,
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,
tornado easily knock out tall
buiding
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
 so people will be
proteced
kept safe or defended from danger or injury or loss
protected
.
Furthermore
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,
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,
in the morning human always lack of energy so all the
activitis
any specific behavior
activities
activists
 are leisurely and easy to be
late but
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late, but
horizonal
parallel to or in the plane of the horizon or a base line
horizontal
 house assist people to save their time and faster escape from the house to their workplace.
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, I pay my faith in the idea that live in vertical
city
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 is the best choice. The most
obivous
easily perceived by the senses or grasped by the mind
obvious
 reason is that a
city
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 with more skyscraper will use less land.
This
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 scenario
enbles
render capable or able for some task
enables
 the government to build facilities for citizen
such
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 as hospital, park, school. Another point worth mentioning is that the view from
skycraper
a very tall building with many stories
skyscraper
 is an attraction that makes many people choose to live because people will see the whole
city
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 and feel yourself closer to the sky. In conclusion, while living
in horizontal
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the horizontal city
city
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 have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of life
in vertical
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vertical cities
city
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 with skyscrap
ers m
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make
akes better choice
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