Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In recent years, several developing cities are chasing the new trend of building in order to cease the overpopulation issues, skyscrapers and terraced houses are the two methods may be put into practise. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of creating more space for housing and constructing as to ease up the mentioned issues. Having sky scrapers in the
city
is not actually a huge
probm
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problem
for the
citizen
,
however
, it may cause a tremendous effect on the environment
in particular
. The reflection of the mirrors which are installed outside the buildings can damage the ability to identify the direction of the birds. Several window glass damaged cases have been recorded and scientists believe that the reflection of window glass is to blame. Anher reason for why we shouldn't build tall building is
this
taller buildings create an enormous windshield which blocks wind blows from every direction and
this
reduce the huge amunt of fresh air
that is
supposed to be the lung of the
city
and at the same time polluted air can not escape from the
city
below so it keep harming the citizens health. The solution in which I believe is the best way to solve the overpopulation issues is that creating more areas for housing purposes and strictly advice people not to violate the standardised landscape rules, by
this
,
however
, will create a perfect distance in every household and
citizen
will have more space to live and to breath.
For example
, Australia has already executed
this
plan in terms of creating the
idal
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
living condition for its
citizen
, and they have succeeded in doing so, the result of which brings the better beneficial for the people in both physically and mentally. In conclusion, it is extremely crucial for governments to chose either building skyscrapers or to build on wider areas because both of which will determine the living condition of the
citizen
in general.
Howeer
Suggestion
However
, by avoiding taller buildings we may achieve far more beneficial in a long run for the
city
dwellers rather than having a high-rise building in many major cities.
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  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
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  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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