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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

#people #technology #relationships #development
The line graph illustrates the number of thefts per thousand vehicles in four different countries between the years 1990 and 1999. Overall, the majority of cars were stolen in Great Briton during
this
 given period of time. In 1996, in
this
 country, 20 cars per thousand people were stolen, and its numbers were significantly fluctuated between the years 1990 and 1999. According to the line graph, in Sweden,
this
 number is gradually increased from the 9 car thefts in 1990 to 14 car thefts in 1999.
However
, France and Canada have experienced a similar trend. Their numbers per thousand people is fluctuated at the beginning,
however
, it decreased at the end of the period. To conclude,
although
 Great Britian and Sweden has experienced negative trend, as their numbers were increased at the end, France and Canada's numbers were decreased.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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