Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

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Many believe that buying unwanted things due to the good impression of the advertisement,

however we

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however, we

do not require them, whereas some people say advertisement reveal many recent products that are beneficial and

also

make our daily living easily.I believe it is a progressive development which we are going to discuss in the span of

this

essay. We are living in the 21st century where science has given us many wonderful inventions to make our activity easier, and we won’t be able to know about these greatest discoveries without advertisement of the production.

such

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as Television, washing machine, refrigerator. We cannot deny the fact that our growth would be more challenging without them as old traditional ways are difficult, time consuming and a lot of effort needed to perform them. People of our century are educated enough to choose the good commodity, their activity has became a robot and they always lack of time for every thing,

however

advertisements can mould them to buy the lucrative things whether they are quality manufactured and time saving, there are lots of advertising for the similar products which creates chaos and confusion for a consumer to decide what to buy and what to not. But it's always good to do some pre-exercise about the commodity and compare. Though marketing of brand encourages us to take the things from the market,

however

, we do not need them and it

also

creates some awareness and comparison from range of products so that customers can decide what is the best buy work. As it is going to be the part of their life and eventually made that easy.

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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

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