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Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals

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Nowadays, more and more zoos are opened up,
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
 a significant controversial concern to human society. It is debated whether zoological gardens are cruel or they
protect
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are protected
 animals. Both aspects will be
further
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 discussed. On the one hand, zoos are institutions created in order to protect wild animals and those in danger, as well as to broaden population’ horizons by giving them the chance to introduce themselves in
rare
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rarely
 seen animals.
For example
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, the Floo Zoo in Dubai became famous due to the fact that there is a section consisting of really beautiful rare birds worldwide. The zoo’s director noted
taht
pointing out something
that
 there are only a few of those birds
inhabitating
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
inhabiting
 the planet, so their aim is to ensure their reproduction and avoid extinction. It is fact that these gardens, not only are useful as an educational tool for people to witness animals that would not be possible
otherwise
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 but they help to conserve endangered species.
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, in these days and age, zoos focus on the profit in lieu of
animal’s
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animal
 welfare. In 2018 in New York Zooland, it was reported that the animals were in really bad condition, not fed properly and with
noticed
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notices
 altered behavioural patterns as the zoo was unable to cover the expenses due to
low number
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the low number
 of visitors.
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, zoologists stated that 80 per cent of the diseased animals would be in complete health if in nature. The negative impact
in
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on
 animals is clearly visible. Conclusively,
zoo
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the zoo
a zoo
 is a widely argued topic. Notwithstanding, they were built to secure animals’ world surveillance, it feels like the aim is lost. With the situation remaining same, it is expected that in future more animals will be in danger and
this
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 time world will experience a ‘’human-made’’ extinction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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