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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of fame an invasion into their private lives?

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Different people has different perspectives concerning the way media treat celebrities.Some of them think
privacy
 is equally needed by everybody while others think fame comes at a certain price and
that is
 to sacrifice your
privacy
. From my point of view, the media mostly breaches the
right
 of
privacy
. I strongly believe that media should refrain itself from violating
privacy
 of celebrities.
Privacy
 is equally necessary for everybody and it is unethical to pry into personal matters of anyone.
Firstly
, whether they are famous or not, everybody has the
right
 of
privacy
 and these rights are protected by law in many countries. Just because of the fact that they are famous personalities people can’t say that they don’t have private lives. Everyone should have private lives as it’s a psychological need and the
right
 of
privacy
 should be protected by laws. It’s surprising that even today in some countries like Samoa, Afghanistan and Togo doesn’t have the
right
 of
privacy
.
Secondly
, In
this
 technological age media has a huge power as it can reach almost all of us by using tools like television, newspapers, radio, magazines and as the most important one internet. Actually,
this
 fact is very useful in our lives, but sometimes media take advantage of
this
 huge power. Media exaggerates as far as possible while making news and it’s called media hype. It is unacceptable to use
such
 news for enhancing the ratings.The main purpose of the media should be making true news.
On the other hand
, supporters of the media think that celebrities don’t have private lives in the public sphere.
Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
 even think that if they don’t go to places like famous restaurants they won’t be seen on cameras so they can have some private space.
This
 idea isn’t completely
right
. All people have the
right
 of
privacy
 and just because they are famous personalities, their private lives can’t be restricted. Media should avoid invading celebrity's
privacy
.
Submitted by Ozgur Gul on

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