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The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assignments over the school year. What do you think of this trend?

There is a tendency to believe that traditional paper tests should be substituted by
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ongoing tasks. From my perspective,
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 the examination is known as the most effective method to
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true
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 performance, both techniques can be beneficial or ineffective at the same time
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advantages
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 of them. First of all, it should be said that one of the obvious privileges of written tests is boosting the spirit of competition in pupils and pushing the limit of their personal abilities. In fact, a paper questioning by developing a sense of rivalry, can eventually bring
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 and perseverance
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 are two fundamental constructive outcomes in
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 can act as the essential qualities in their future professional lives
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. For illustration, in order to gain
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 promotion in
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,
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 continuing assignments will not
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 if they have not occurred in a challenging situation.
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, despite the many advantages of the paper test, it can be a great source of stress and mental pressure for many students
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 it may lead to their later health problems.
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, getting low grades for younger children
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, not only can create disinterest toward the academic lessons, but over and above that may result in anxiety and depression through the negative
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.
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, continuing practices seem to be more reliable in
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 regard and at least do not have any serious effects on them. In conclusion,
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 there are many irreplaceable benefits in the testing
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 as boosting the spirit of competition and personal development, it could affect children's well-being negatively and
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 discouragement to follow their learning.
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, both examination and ongoing tasks can be constructive and
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 disruptive as well and teachers should find the best way of developing pupils' performance.

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Your introduction should clearly state your opinion. Instead of mentioning both sides, you can focus more on your view.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph. This helps the reader understand your main point better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to provide a strong conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint and main points, so it leaves a good final impression.
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Work on using more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to improve the overall quality of your writing.
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You presented good arguments for both sides of the discussion.
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You included examples that help support your points, which is great for clarity.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comprehensive evaluation
  • High-stakes exams
  • Targeted support
  • Learning experiences
  • Mental state
  • Continuous assessment
  • Workload
  • Retention
  • Engage consistently
  • Time management
  • Disadvantage
  • Assessment pressure
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