Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

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Every person has
desire
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a desire
the desire
to live in a perfect
society
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. But nowadays we merely see the existence of a perfect
society
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. Because people are almost losing their morals and norms which they have learned from their families. A perfect
society
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is built upon on several ingredients. I think that in order to form a perfect
society
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these three elements should be persisted in a
society
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. These are
well
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good
communication
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between the members of
thr
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the
their
society
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,
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,
high education rate
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the high education rate
among the members of the
society
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and high employment rate. In a perfect
society
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relationship between the members is truly good. The members of a perfect
society
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knows
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know
each other very well and the
communication
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between them is good. They always get ready to help anyone at anytime.
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communication
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Communication
is mandatory for a perfect
society
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. Because if the members
dont
do not
don't
know each other very well
then
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they cannot form a
society
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because
well
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good
communication
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between the members of a
society
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is the core element which should be satisfied by a perfect
society
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. Many
sociologist
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sociologists
put huge emphasizes on
this
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specific term. The members of a
society
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must be well educated. Because an educated person more tends to abide the law of a
society
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than an uneducated person. Educated people can pour a
society
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with their conscience and sensibility.
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Moreover they
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Moreover, they
can set up peace and harmony in a
society
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. We barely see
riot
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rioting
and chaos in a
society
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where most of the members are educated. And most
importantly they
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importantly, they
spread their knowledge and
well
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good
thoughts among the members which really instigate others in following the right path. High
employmment
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
unemployment
ratio among the members assist to make an established
society
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. It uprises the living style of the
society
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members. A
society
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with a bunch of wealth and established people are the building block of a perfect
society
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.
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, when there is no
persistancy
the property of a continuous and connected period of time
persistence
of need among the
members
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members, then
then
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one cannot witness any chaotic incident in that
society
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. In conclusion, We
can said
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can say
that a perfect
society
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is based upon on
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this
plural of "this"
these
three elements. There are
also
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other elements which should be consisted in a
society
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. But these
there
being one more than two
three
elements are
compulsary
required by rule
compulsory
for any
society
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. People should emulate these elements in their real life. In order to make a perfect
society
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these elements should be instilled in a
society
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and must be followed by the individual members.
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