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Some people think that should be strict laws to controlled the amount of noise a person make because of disturbance it causes to people Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some people suggest that should be strict legislation upon persons who
noise
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 others and controlled it even through forces, others believe
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this
plural of "this"
these
 laws stand against their rights. I will discuss argument in
this
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 essay and clearing my opinion. At the beginning, the
noise
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 considered undeserved activists in the society especially when the person exposed to the
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noise even
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noise, even
 inside their house,
however
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, the governments
must be protect
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must protect
must be protected
 the
health
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healthy
healthiest
 lifestyle from uncomfortable attitudes, the best instance of
this
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;
when
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When
 the person had I'll, the
noise
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 implicated to
worse
grow worse
worsen
 the situation and
gain headache
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gain, headache
, another example of
this
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; university students can't
listening
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listen
 well and lost their concentrate due to annoy from neighbour's loud sounds.
Any way
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Anyway
, the governments in many developing countries like Europe prevented others from bothering inhabitants that lived in the same building and
setted
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
seated
settled
 fines for violating.
Nevertheless
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,
besides
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 of putting real roles that prevents from
noise
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 of people, many
people particularly
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people, particularly
 youth thought there is other ways to
saved
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save
 the leisure of residents
for example
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;
the
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The
 scientists invented new
technologies including
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technologies, including
 doors and windows with
untransmitted
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 walls to sound indeed headphones can
used
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use
 to
decreas
decrease in size, extent, or range
decrease
 the level of
noise
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. The conclusion,
inspite
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in spite
 of I agree with the governments should protect the
health lifestyle
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health, lifestyle
 and provide the leisure ways for people, even though, they shouldn't neglect the human rights and inhibit their freedom by putting incredible laws and
roles
a principle or condition that customarily governs behavior
rules
.
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