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Some People Think That Books Should Be Stopped In School And That Video Films And Computers Should Be Used Instead

#people #books #school #video #films #computers
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In
this
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 day and age, when the technology is in its full blossom, it is undoubtedly that
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 technology has grown rapidly in the past few years, many people predict that it will develop faster in the future.
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, it is believed that print out books in school will be replaced by videos, films along with computers. In my point of view,
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 the importance of printed books will decrease significantly, hardcopy books will continue to exist in the future. To start with, it is undeniable that owing to the existence of computers, a variety of
information
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 can be obtained which can aid the students’ studies. There are numerous websites which provide valuable
knowledge
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knowledge, such
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 as “www.
national
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National
 geographic.
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Com
” or “www.
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Discovery
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Come
Com
”.
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, many available electronic newspapers
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 as CNN or BBC are
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amazing source
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an amazing source
 of
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.
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, due to the fact that computers equip the students with
visual representation
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a visual representation
 of
information
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 via the use of films and video clips, the teaching process will definitely be enriched as well as becoming more fun and interactive.
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, it is reasonable to understand why many people prefer
electronical
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
electronics
devices including
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devices, including
 other means of visual aids rather than to purchase the print out one.
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,
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 the computers are filled with useful resources, not all students can have access to the right content; meanwhile, course books are a more reliable and approved material which has been used for many years. With a view to benefit the students, textbooks are usually written with detailed, up-to-date content pages in a particular subject area so the students can be at ease
when seeking out for
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for when seeking out
information
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. They
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 provide structure for a student's learning. Each chapter should have a logical flow, building on the knowledge acquired in previous chapters. On behalf of the teacher, the material and structure of lessons
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are
have been
are being
 often very well-designed, which means that teachers don't have to spend a lot of time coming up with novel lesson ideas. To conclude, with the aforementioned advantages of books:
reliable
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Reliable
 and approved material, well-designed flow as well as structure which is beneficial to not only
students but
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students, but
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 the teachers, it can be reiterated that
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 the usage of computers and other means of social media plays a profound role in schools nowadays, the existence of books is
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 vital.
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