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The graph demonstrates the amounts of
usage
 in millions of cubic meters by unit from seven types of industries in some countries around the world. Overall, the chemical
industry
 is the highest consumer of the
water
 from the public either from public supply or
groundwater
, while the machinery
industry
 takes part as the lowest consumer to the
groundwater
.
Also
, the fuel and textile sector contributed the lowest on the
usage
 of public supply
water
 sources. The highest consumer of the
groundwater
 and public supply
water
source
 is the chemical industries which is 430 and 240
million
 cubic meters. In comparison, the fuel and textile industries are the lowest users of the public supply
water
source
 which only 10
million
 cubic meters
usage
 annually and the rate of
groundwater
 capacity is higher which are 70 and 80
million
 cubic meters.
On the other hand
, the Machinery
industry
 annual
usage
 of
groundwater
source
 is 10
million
 cubic meters, which are the lowest of all industries that used
groundwater
 while the
usage
 from the public supply is 100
million
 cubic meters. Turning to, the paper, metal and food, drinks
industry
 are consumed the
water
 from
groundwater
Suggestion
a groundwater source
groundwater sources
the groundwater source
source
 in 190, 110 and 240
million
 meters cubic, respectively.
Also
, the annual
water
usage
 from public supply for the three industries that mentioned before are 20, 50 and 190
million
 meters cubic.
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