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Resolving environmental issues become the matter of grave

cocern

be relevant to

concern

among countries.It is often debated that

wheather

introduces two alternatives

whether

water

environmental concerns should be tackled by individual nations or joint global efforts are needed.I shall put a light on both ways and

then

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try to reach on an opinion.

Individuales

Suggestion

Individuals

Individual's

who

suggests

Suggestion

suggest

that environmental

issuses

prepare and issue for public distribution or sale

issues

shoul

expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something

should

shall

be cured globally believed that collaborated actions of all

world

Suggestion

worlds

could be more effective and long lasting.To elucidate

Accept space

if all rule and regulations for carbon emission and uses of non-renewable sources are imposed

worldwidely

Suggestion

than

subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)

then

it would become a compulsion for every nation to follow these stringent laws

;

Accept space

;

consequently

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, there will be surely

decrease

Suggestion

decreased

in the contamination of natural resources.

Moreover

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, joint efforts by all authorities could make some international

sachemes

an elaborate and systematic plan of action

schemes

to deter environmental

pollution

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pollution, such

such

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as decreasing air transport and water transport

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to conserve air and water from contamination.

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, a part of society

argue

Suggestion

argues

that it should be onus of a nation to save its environment. They

condems

undergo condensation; change from a gaseous to a liquid state and fall in drops

condense

condemn

that only

goverment

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

cand

able to

can

and

educate and aware its citizens about the environmental issues and could solve these problems

with in

internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of

within

the country.

For example

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, in developing nations

such

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as India,

alot

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a lot

of awareness is needed for conservation of natural resources like water and air.

which

Suggestion

Which

could be achieved by the efforts of

indiviuals

a human being

individuals

and authorities, in

such

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cases international

Suggestion

cases, international

firms could not help much.

Thus

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, awareness and education related to environmental concerns can be provided by national efforts. In conclusion, after looking at both the aspects. I

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personally, opine that environment is a global issue nowadays, it could be resolved only by the joint efforts of national

goverments

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

governments

and international

socities

an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization

societies

securities

Hence

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, they should work hand in hand for the conservation of

environment

Suggestion

the environment

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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