IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Some people believe online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas other believe that only printed material shoul be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #child #shoul
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Reading information from web pages should be used for a child's learning is a belief of a few parents, while others say that a paper-based reading is the best way.
Although
Linking Words
, the
internet
Use synonyms
 provides up-to-date information for the children, I believe that it might have a negative influence on a child's future without parental guidance. Data from wired networks gives a current situation of every content or subject being studied. Books often provide outdated details about the content, because they are not edited always. Getting recent facts about the topics increases confidence in students as well as learning.
This
Linking Words
 will helps them achieve in their studies and score higher academically.
For instance
Linking Words
, an article published in the Times of India had given a clear picture of the advantages of using web platforms for learning. Even though,
internet
Use synonyms
 reading assists in gaining knowledge, it
also
Linking Words
 endangers learning in other ways. Learning will be distorted by
internet
Use synonyms
 if there is no proper supervision. There are a lot of fishing sites that always pop out at surfing. Being attractive, it can easily catch the attention of students’ more than informative ones. There is a possibility those children can get addicted to it.
This
Linking Words
 may disturb their growth by affecting learning and the behaviours.Sometimes
this
Linking Words
 might result in danger to life. To explain
this
Linking Words
, the blue whale game can be taken as the best example. But using books may reduce these worries and
also
Linking Words
 easy to use. Reading is the best way to learn at all ages. Using soft or hard materials has a different impact on learning at their levels. While looking into the current scenario, reading from the
internet
Use synonyms
 would be the best option to opt, but prospectively, it has a negative influence on the child's learning in many ways.
Submitted by chandbibi angusamy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: