Some people argue that technological invention such as mobile phones are making people socially less interactive.

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, many people believe that the growth of modern innovations has adverse effects on our society. They think that technological gadgets hinders the social interaction among humans.
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, I think in a reverse manner and completely disagree with the given statement. My indications are justified in following paragraphs. Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my view is that modern innovation has revolutionized the way we live. What I mean to say is technology has shrunk our big planet earth into a small global village.
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, it bridged the gap between people. Nowadays, communication system became quite easier and accessible.
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is because of the invention of mobile phones.
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, person can easily
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, a person can easily
communicate with his/her family or friends in the fraction of a
second
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living in every nook and corner using cell phones
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The other reason to prove my point is that various social media sites act as a platform for the general public
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certailnly
definitely or positively ('sure' is sometimes used informally for 'surely')
certainly
benefits the society as one can raise their voice or share their views regarding any social issue through
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modern gismos.
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, along with the access of internet
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mobile phone offers several useful
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sources
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social
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as
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Facebook
, twitter,
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etc
continuing in the same way
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which can connect us to the entire world. In
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way we can
aquire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
important information about current affairs.
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, it
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helps to find long-lost friends through these social sites. On contrary, some people counter claim that above mentioned support. The foremost point they put forward is that wireless phones
has
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have
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
on social relations. In simple words, with the invention of devices, people get engrossed with their
gadgets especially
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gadgets, especially
,
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
get hooked to the digital screen for long hours.
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often leads
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to deteriorating
the family bonds due to lack of quality time.
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, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite the reckless use of phones results in less family time. My reasons that better communication and
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a reduction
in
gap
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the gap
between mankind are logically acceptable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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