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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global sporting events which interest several nations around the world are a remarkable opportunity to demonstrate to other countries all the positive features of the hosting
nation
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.
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, these massive events are always linked to a large amount of
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 spent and
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, some individuals claim that these huge expenses are often unnecessary and exaggerated. All in all, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. 
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, international sporting events
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 as the Olympic games, which are being held every 4 years, are an extraordinary source of income for the
nation
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 since visitors always come from different countries around the world and
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 they are willing to spend lots of
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 on accommodations, foods and entrance tickets.  According to my own experience, in 2006 I came to London with my family to see the Olympic games and we had to spend much
money
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 in order to find an accommodation, close to the Olympic stadium and
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 of all to be able to purchase the tickets.
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, another main advantage for the hosting
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 is that through these international sporting events, the local community which includes the local shops, restaurants and residential areas can gain fame around the world and therfore with the sum of
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 earned, the governament has the opportunity to remodernize and retrain the area. A clear example, could be Stratford in East London, since it has been redeveloped over the years after the Olympic games and
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 new modern buildings
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 as the massive shopping centre have been built. To conclude, I absolutely agree that hosting international sporting events can be very challenging for a
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nation especially
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nation, especially
 in financial terms, but
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, the notoriety that the
nation
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 can gain and all the
money
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 earned through hotel bookings, foods, gadgets, are surely much more valuable.
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