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In ‘Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries’ How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today? (school-leavers = young people who leave school without going on to further studies.)

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Youth unemployment is certainly a worrying challenge for most
countries
, especially at a time of economic instability and social unrest.
However
, to say that
this
 is the largest issue is to overlook a range of equally pressing matters, as we will discuss now. It must be admitted that joblessness can undermine a young person’s economic prospects and consequent social mobility.
Nevertheless
,
this
 issue can be ameliorated by coordinated action between the state and the private sector, as we have seen,
for instance
, in Canada recently. When
this
 is realized, we can see that other concerns are at least as serious. Foremost among these is perhaps the issue of age demographics, whereby young
people
 bear the burden
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 an increasingly elderly population with high longevity.
This
 means that young
people
 will pay higher taxes and work longer hours, possibly forcing them to migrate to
countries
 where
this
 pressure is lower. The effect of
this
 is the ‘brain drain’ situation which can be seen in southern Europe, where young, ambitious
people
 prefer to leave their
countries
 altogether, exacerbating the problem for those remaining.
Furthermore
, we must remember that a substantial proportion of young
people
 globally face existential threats
such
 as famine, drought or outbreaks of disease. These problems are often caused by (or are compounded by) civil war, political instability or the corruption of
people
 in power locally.
Such
 risks are a danger to their safety in addition to their livelihood, and so would appear to be far more serious than unemployment.
To conclude
, it seems logical to accept that joblessness is a major challenge for young
people
.
However
, persistent trends in demographics among developed
countries
 and the presence of physical dangers in developing
countries
 should be regarded as at least as severe.
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