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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Disscus both view and give your opinion.

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In the 21st century, there are two main types of
city
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: horizontal
city
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 which the houses lie adjacent to the ground and the vertical
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 with multi-storey houses. While some people consider better provision of horizontal
city
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 is the best choice, I am of opinion that vertical
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 as a great solution. On the one hand, it is believed that living in horizontal
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 is the greatest. A concluding explanation is that living in the ground is safer. The natural disaster problems,
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 as storm, earthquake
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tornado easily knocks high-storey building out so people will be protected.
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, in the morning human always lack of energy so all the activities are leisurely and easy to be late, but the horizontal house assists people to save their time and faster escape from the house to their workplace.
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, I pay my faith in the idea that live in vertical
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 is the best choice. The most obvious reason is that a
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 with more skyscraper will use less land.
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 scenario enables the government to build facilities for citizen
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 as hospital, park, school. Another point worth mentioning is that the view from skyscraper is an attraction that makes many people choose to live because people will see the whole
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 and feel yourself closer to the sky. In conclusion, while living in a horizontal
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 have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of life in a vertical
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 with skyscraper make better choice
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