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Now a days many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or an organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of self employment

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Entrepreneurship has become the new norm in the recent years. People prefer to have a
self
 made
business
instead
 of working for an organisation for a mere monthly pay-check.
This
 essay would highlight the reasons behind the same and will discuss the pros and cons of
self
 employment.
Firstly
, with the advancement of technology and the wide reach of internet
to
Suggestion
of
 almost each and every household, setting up a new
business
 has become quite easy and affordable. All
one
 would need is a reliable internet connection.
For instance
, a computer graduate can casually sit in his home and start making video based lectures and tutorials about a programming platform or a framework he is best knowledgeable in.
Similarly
, a homemaker can start making videos about his/her cooking lessons or special recipes and upload it on the relevant platforms to get the expected revenue.
This
 would avoid different stressful situations which people working for an organisation usually experience due to tight deadlines and high expectations by seniors.
However
,
self
 employment has its own disadvantages the most common
one
 being financial insecurity. Apart from it,
one
 would need a great deal of dedication, consistency and patience in order for the
self
-made
business
 to flourish.
Moreover
, owing to the high competition in the start-up
business
 market, a person has to keep on coming up with new trending ideas in order to keep the customer base intact. To recapitulate, both
self
 employed and salaried jobs have their owns merits and demerits,
one
 should consider his sensibilities before choosing the right path.
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