Your children’s grade 5 class teacher likes to take the children on field trips to museums or parks. Sometimes the teacher takes the children on public buses. Some parents are unhappy. They say the school should always use school buses even though it is more expensive. You have been asked to respond to an opinion survey. Option A: Public Transit: I think it’s okay for children to travel on public transit. Option B: School Buses: I would prefer children only travel on school buses.

I personally think that it is alright for children to travel on the public transit, since there are always teachers who accompany them for field trips. They will
hence
be monitored at all times. I think that an education system is not there only for the academic development of a child. An education system is meant to be a complete education package that helps in getting a child ready to step
in
Suggestion
into
the world after the school years are done. I believe that when taking the children out for a field trip by taking the public transit, the teachers
also
get a chance to teach them what to be careful about,
for example
, they will be taught not to accept gifts from strangers, or not to follow a stranger. These are important life lessons that a child should be taught. Unfortunately, I think that if the children always travel on school buses, they will be over-protected. In the long run, it only makes life harder for themselves when it's time for them to step in the real world, after school days.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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