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It goes without saying that students who get high scores in schools will be rewarded.
However
, many acknowledges that those who showed improvements are more deserving prizes. Since each method has its own advantages and disadvantages, I think it is best if schools could award both the high achievers as well as the ones that make great progress with their studying. To make headway or be among the best students is obviously no picnic. It requires a lot of time, effort and endurance. To do well in the exams, even the smartest students have to learn very hard.
Therefore
, the high achievers should be awarded.
Also
, they will set up a good example to make other students as well as the study environment become highly competitive.
As a result
, all students will always have to try their best if they want to catch up with friends. As time goes by, there will be less and less lazy students.
However
,
this
way of rewarding can sometimes be kill or cure. That’s why we
also
need to give some credits for the ones that make great progress with their studying. John Wooden once said: it’s not what you can do, but the way you do it that counts.
For instance
, a student may doesn’t score very high on the exams, but the work that he put in to make a difference is certainly worth to be praised too. At times, when people tried too hard, but couldn’t actually achieve anything, they will lose heart. They will stop trying because they felt like no matter what or how much they have done, their work all went to waste. The feeling of being left behind will depress those students, stressed them, drive them into walls. Clearly, it’s important, to show encouragement to students who made an effort. And what’s the best way to do so? Award them. Make them feel that they were judged fairly not only for their marks or test results. It’s the prizes which will keep them motivated to become better and better. To what have been discussed above, even though nowadays most schools tend to reward students who show the best academic results only, I hope that 1day it will be possible for those who actually show improvements to have their prizes too.
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