2. Nowadays, there is a trend that media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments .Some people think that it is harmful to individuals and to society .To what extend do you agree?

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Many people
aruge
present reasons and arguments
argue
that
media
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the media
give attention only to problem and emergencies
instead
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of developments which leads to harmful effects
to
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on
society as well as individuals. I
am partlly agree
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partly agree
am partly agree
have partly agreed
am partially agree
am portly agree
with
this
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statement.
First
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of all
,
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,
media plays a crucial role in today's time. Only through media one can come to know that what happened outside. Media is
best platform
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the best platform
for providing information to public. As most people think media
spred
distribute or disperse widely
spread
speed
information only regarding problems.
Its
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It's
good for us to know about the problems so it provide opportunity to youngsters to find solutions for those problems
For
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instance if
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instance, if
there is news regarding
water issue
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the water issue
or water
sacrcity
a small and inadequate amount
scarcity
.
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.
it
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It
help
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helps
to
wakeup
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wake up
the youngsters to take steps regarding
this
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like they plant more trees
.
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.
there
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There
was
an
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a
one act started by youngsters
of
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on
planting trees 10 years ago in my
hometown so
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hometown, so
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think
its
it is
it's
not actually bad if media aware us about the problems. On the other side if media regularly spread these kind of news it may spread negativity among people. As in today time everyone
suffer
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suffers
from depression because of work stress and many other
reasons so
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reasons, so
if they continuously listen to bad news it may make them more frustrate. So
media
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the media
should
also
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focus on some positive news like if there is something new
happend
come to pass
happened
in any city they should focus on that
instead
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of problems.
In addition
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to it
,
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,
media
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the media
should
also
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appreciate the efforts taken by youngsters in tackling problems
.
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.
Appreciation
enhance
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enhances
the confidence and they feel more motivated to do more positive things In
nutshell
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a nutshell
,
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,
I want to say that both
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
and negative news are part of life we should find
positive way
Suggestion
a positive way
positive ways
to tackle them
instead
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getting upset by
this
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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