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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures. We can learn from books, films and internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#travel #places #cultures #books #films #internet
Some people
has
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have
 the opinion that it is not necessary to travel all the places to learn about other
cultures we
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cultures, we
 can learn from
books films
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books, films
 and
internet
 in my opinion I don't agree with
this
 idea We can learn the other cultures in the
internet
films but
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films, but
 it isn't enough. Learning from these transport only have people having knowledge which. There are many things people can understand deeply and it can lead to thing wrong ways about the other cultural. Learning from books people can know about the pictures.
Besides
 that learning from
internet there
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the internet, there
the internet there
 are many unknown origin information and people can easily read it
In
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On
 the other
hand if
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hand, if
 we travel to other places to learn about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 culture we can learn many things about that culture. Learning with the practical experience is better than learning from books films and
internet
. We can learn from people in those
country
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countries
 because they know a lot of things that we don't know we can go to the place we want to learn and find what we want by ourself to learn the
barning
the act of burning something
burning
 practical experience help us to remember the knowledge easily
This
 is the reason why I think travel to other places to learn about other cultures. I hope if people
can they
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can, they
 should go out to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 country to find about all the cultures and personally I think it is
very good way
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a very good way
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