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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? Are there more advantages than disadvantages?

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Modernization is the consequence of the advancement in technology which has influenced the social life of the masses deeply
with
Suggestion
by
 the introduction of various social media applications. I firmly perceive that its demerits surpasses its merits.
Moreover
, I will discuss the reasons and its demerits in the subsequent paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, with the introduction of various social media softwares, messaging via an application has become the most convenient way to start
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 the
conversation
 with a stranger.
Moreover
, it
also
 curbs down the hesitation which can spoil the initial
conversation
 and
thus
 spoiling the initial impression.
Secondly
,
third
 person can easily respond to the text whenever he or she feels idle whereas a call may disturb a person. To exemplify, according to a research by an Indian organisation a report reveals that the seventy-five percent of citizens opt to ping rather than calling an individual. Apart from its merits there are various demerits. To start with, it
do not enhance
Suggestion
does not enhance
 the confidence level of the youngster and one will always hesitate to talk to the person of the opposite sex. On top of it, conveying confidential information over these platforms may
results
Suggestion
result
 in disputes.
Last
 but not the least,
conversation
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the conversation
 over the texts takes plenty of time rather than calling. To recapitulate, short message service has made the
conversation
 between the two creatures a convenient one, by reducing the hustle.
Additionally
, making a direct call should be preferred rather than messaging as it will surge the personality graph of a guy.
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