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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

It is too expensive to look after and repair old building .Tho money should spend on building new modern buildings instead .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is the belief of some people that it needs huge amounts of money to take care
and
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of and
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 maintenance of ancient
monuments
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monuments,
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while
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 others recommend that
instead
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 of wasting cash on museums,
this
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 capital ought to
utilise
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be utilised
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 for flourishing new infrastructures.I totally disagree with the latter statement.
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 taking the view into
consideration
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consideration,
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 why should we preserve old buildings
,
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? Firstly
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firstly
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, they give
the
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apply
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cultural and aesthetic values.As
,
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apply
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 these constructions are the one way to promote our historical importance among the youth
and
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, and
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also
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these
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they
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are acting
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act
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 as
'mine
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a 'mine
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 of gold' for the masses.Actually, these properties give hands-on experience to students of
arts
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the arts
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and
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, and
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also it is
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it is also
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 very beneficial for history
teacher
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teachers
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 to teach students by having visit to these
places
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places,
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 because in
this
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way
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way,
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 learners
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do need
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need not
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not need
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 to put
many efforts
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much effort
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 to learn long tasks.
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, ancient structures contribute to
incline
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inclining
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 the economy of the country. Many tourists are attracted towards these buildings because of their beauty.So, they use to exchange capital for fulfilling their desires.To add more, people residing in local areas have an opportunity to get
an
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employment sources and can get a chance to earn their livelihood.So, these
also
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rise
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raise
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 the income of the nation as
income-per-capita
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income per capita
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 contributes to
overall
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 growth.
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, numerous visitors use to visit
historical
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the historical
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 building Taj Mahal. To
summarize
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summarise
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, ancient buildings give
the
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apply
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cultural, aesthetic and historical importance. So, it must be the duty of an individual and
authorities
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the authorities
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 to protect these precious structures.

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task response
Make a clear plan. Start with one line giving your view. Then give two or three reasons with simple facts or examples.
coherence
Use a short intro with a clear main idea. Each paragraph should have one main idea and a link to the idea before it.
coherence
Use link words like also, but, so, therefore to help flow. Keep sentences simple and steady. Check grammar and spelling.
stance
The writer gives a clear view to protect old buildings.
content
There are points on culture, money and jobs that fit the task.
example
An example is given with the Taj Mahal to show impact.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical significance
  • cultural heritage
  • renovation
  • restoration
  • architectural value
  • environmentally friendly
  • community identity
  • cost efficiency
  • sustainable development
  • unique character
  • sense of place
  • long-term maintenance
  • modern construction
  • initial costs
  • economic benefits
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