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Large shopping malls are replacing small shops. What is your opinion about this?

#malls #shops
Countries overall development has led to a series of changes
such
 as transforming various small shops into a one big
infrastructre
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
infrastructures
 with all sorts of
entertainement
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
.Street markets have declined enormously over the span of 45-50 years.I believe it has a positive impact on the
countries
Suggestion
country's
 economy and status With the rising standards of people they tend to choose products which are more trusted and widely used thereby increasing their standard of living.
Moreover
,
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,
shopping malls have
wide variety
Suggestion
a wide variety
 of options and brands under the same
roof whereas
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roof, whereas
 it can be a difficult task for people to find the exact product they need in small shops.Which can be very tiresome and time
consuming
Suggestion
consuming?
Furthermore
,
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,
shopping centres have more facilities
such
 as kids play zone
,
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,
food courts for refreshments and snacks which can be of a great use for parents who wants to shop peacefully without any disturbance
.
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.
Although
 prices may be
comparetively
in a relative manner; by comparison to something else
comparatively
 less in small shops it cannot guarantee its customer a proper service.
In addition
, small shops
uses
Suggestion
use
 cheaper ways to purchase items which may or may not be safe for consumption.Overall, people tend to trust bigger shops more rather than the ones on
street
Suggestion
the street
 In conclusion, advantages of larger shops
out weigh
be heavier than
outweigh
 the advantages of small shops.And malls should be
whole heartedly
without reserve; without reservation
wholeheartedly
 welcome as it
bring
Suggestion
brings
 with it a better shopping experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • one-stop shopping
  • diverse products
  • convenience
  • amenities
  • food courts
  • entertainment options
  • local economy
  • commercial activity
  • artisanal
  • niche products
  • customer service
  • homogenization
  • cultural diversity
  • family-owned businesses
  • carbon footprint
  • online shopping
  • consumer preferences
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