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Due to success of convenience food and ready-made meals, we are failing to pass on adequate culinary skills to the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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 and ready – made meals are highly popular at present. Success on convenience
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 and ready-made meals made us fail to move on the essential culinary skills to the
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generation
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generation
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 failed and contribution of convenience
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 ready made meals to it. In todays world, everyone lives a fast moving life.
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, Working long hours are something normal in
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 present
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 and it is one factor that influences cooking cuisine in
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the kitchen
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 amenity meal and ready-made meals occupies a great space. It results in lack of cooking as well. For these reasons, cooking
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 at home is literally reduced and
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 why adequate culinary skills were not taken to the
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, convenience
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 and the ready –made meals are admired by people just because of its less time consuming in cooking, the good taste and its long expiry period.Convenience
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 made every aspect of cooking easier.
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, in my family, my mother works as a teacher. She is always busy with handling house activities and makes herself ready for the
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 classroom session as well. So most of the days cooking becomes a challenging part of her and
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 struggles badly.
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 is the point where all our family members enjoy in experiencing the success of facility
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 and ready-made meal. Despite the fact of using advantage
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 in our family
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 am educated on how to cook
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 with essential culinary skills
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 my mother.
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 to fail on to take the culinary skills to the
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. In my opinion, It is important to teach the culinary skills to the
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 and to avoid easy
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 as much as possible for a healthy future.
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