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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The pie chart illustrates the rate of the destination of
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 graduates
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 in anthropology from a
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 right after they're graduated, while the table compares the salaries of the three typical types of anthropologists who already worked for five years. Overall, the full
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 worker becomes one of the biggest interest
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field
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 that the anthropology graduate
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 wants to be involved, while the part
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 work-post study
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 becomes the lowest
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 of interest with them. After five years of working, government becomes the highest salary types of employment for an anthropologist. The full
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 work
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 accounted for 52% of the anthropologist
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 in one
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 which is taking the biggest part of the destination for anthropology graduate
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 to start a carrier.
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, followed by part-
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 work at 15 %, unemployed at 12% and full
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 postgraduate study and not known, which are 8% on each.
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, the lowest
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 of the destination for a fresh graduate
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 is a part
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 work, plus postgraduate study, which is only for 5%
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 in the whole
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. Turning to, the salaries of the anthropologist that worked for five years in freelance consulting accounted for 40 % for the amounts of 75,000-99,999 and 100,000 while the
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 of 25,00-49,999 only take 15 % of the employee and the
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 of 25,00-49,999 take the smallest rates of the employee, which is only for 5%. In other hand, 50 % of government sector employee received 100,000 or more for the salaries. While only 5 % to get the
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 25,000-49,999.
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 the private company can afford the 35% of their employees to getting 50,00-74,999
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 of salary, while only 10% of
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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