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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The pie chart illustrates the rate of the destination of
university
 graduates
student
 in anthropology from a
university
 right after they're graduated, while the table compares the salaries of the three typical types of anthropologists who already worked for five years. Overall, the full
time
 worker becomes one of the biggest interest
field
Suggestion
fields
 that the anthropology graduate
student
 wants to be involved, while the part
time
 work-post study
field
 becomes the lowest
field
 of interest with them. After five years of working, government becomes the highest salary types of employment for an anthropologist. The full
time
 work
field
 accounted for 52% of the anthropologist
student
 in one
university
 which is taking the biggest part of the destination for anthropology graduate
student
 to start a carrier.
Also
, followed by part-
time
 work at 15 %, unemployed at 12% and full
time
 postgraduate study and not known, which are 8% on each.
Likewise
, the lowest
field
 of the destination for a fresh graduate
student
 is a part
time
 work, plus postgraduate study, which is only for 5%
student
 in the whole
university
. Turning to, the salaries of the anthropologist that worked for five years in freelance consulting accounted for 40 % for the amounts of 75,000-99,999 and 100,000 while the
range
 of 25,00-49,999 only take 15 % of the employee and the
range
 of 25,00-49,999 take the smallest rates of the employee, which is only for 5%. In other hand, 50 % of government sector employee received 100,000 or more for the salaries. While only 5 % to get the
range
 25,000-49,999.
Finally
 the private company can afford the 35% of their employees to getting 50,00-74,999
range
 of salary, while only 10% of
then
objective case of they
them
 can get 50,00-74,999.
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