some people think government should invest more money in teaching science than others subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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funding
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Funding
for
education
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which play a key role in the growth of a nation is a major topic of concern in modern society.
people
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People
have different views about whether the government should subsidize
science
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subjects than others for the betterment of a country or not.
to
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To
a certain extent
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that
science
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education
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is
invitable
incapable of being avoided or prevented
inevitable
unbeatable
inevitably
,
however
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
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believe that they cannot ignore non-scientific subjects.
on
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On
the one hand,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that the investment in
science
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subjects has its own benefits.
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firstly
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Firstly
, a highly trained intellectual workforce may be created by concentrating on
science
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, leading to a
longterm
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long term
improvement of the country.
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secondly
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Secondly
, there are several jobs that require
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science
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scientific
knowledge
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knowledge, such
such
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as
physicist
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physicists
a physicist
, medical scientist and so on.
without
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Without
science
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-based understanding, people cannot get these kinds of jobs which helps create more commercial value.
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lastly
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Lastly
, imagine that if
science
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does not exist, will the modern world today be the same?
the
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The
answer is absolutely 'no'.
as
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As
its products
such
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as computers or computerised
machinary
machines or machine systems collectively
machinery
may not be eventually invented.
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on
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On
the other hand,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am of the opinion that non-scientific subjects are as important as
science
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education
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.
the
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The
first
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reason for
this
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is because subjects like arts or history play an essential part in helping students get comprehensive knowledge and
then
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become a well-rounded person.
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for
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For
instance,
arts
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the arts
helps
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help
student be more creative and confident in expressing themselves, which cannot be
achieve
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achieved
if depends on math and
science
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only.
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in
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In
addition
for
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to
the reason above,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
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believe that if people disregard these subjects,
this
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might cause an imbalance in the distribution of
nation's workforce
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the nation's workforce
.
a
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A
country could not develop with
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science aspect
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the science aspect
alone while the other ones are undervalued.
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consequently
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Consequently
, in order for the shortage of art-related jobs,
such
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as
journalist
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a journalist
or artist, to not emerge, people
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
put stress on them too.
in
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In
conclusion, while it is required for the government to support financially
science
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education
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do not believe that a nation's prosperity can be enhanced if the other aspects are excluded.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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