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Recent advances in medical science have resulted in increased life expectancy over the past few years. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Modern medical science has helped us
in living
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to live
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 a longer life. In my opinion, the positives eclipse the disadvantages in many ways.
While
 there are many advantages, getting more time to live with our family and
increased
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 chance of success are definitely some of the most important ones.
Firstly
, because of
modern era
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 medicines and treatments, diseases are easily curable, which keeps us alive for many additional years with our loved ones. It allows us to contribute more towards their well-being.
For example
, a few decades ago children were often orphaned at a young age, which left them vulnerable and lonely.
Hence
, having our parents around to guide us even when we are legally
adult
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adults
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, surely has some advantages.
Additionally
, a longer life boosts the chance of our success. It not only helps us to dedicate additional years to our education
,
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 but
also
 increases
working
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our working
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 span,
thus
, the opportunity
of achieving
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 more in the long run.
For instance
, someone with more than 15 years of education has a greater chance of getting a higher salary, than others.
Therefore
, if achievement and fulfilment are the goals, the same could not have been completed without getting to survive for a longer time with the help of modern diagnosis and medical science. In conclusion,
latest
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 technologies associated with medical science are a boon to
the
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human kind
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humankind
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,
because
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and because
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 of
which
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 we have been enjoying the beautiful world around us much more than our previous generations.
Moreover
, it has aided in our success too, making our life more meaningful.
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