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Scientific research should be the responsibility of government than commercial organizations . Do you agree or disagree .

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It seems the issue as whether scientific
research
 should do under the command of the Government than other
company
. Few people raise their eyebrows at the above stated notion yet I totally agree with a given statement To integrate with
first
 argument, It can be said that the Government act as the mother of their nation and it has full power and budget for doing different
research
.
In addition
, it will be increased jobs in normal public.
Moreover
, other. The
company
 can sell nation information to another country because of their profit and they can do, not to promotion of anyone for any
research
 whether it's helpful or harmful.
However
, I would argue that companies play
such
 an important role in conducting scientific
research
. The
first
 reason is that since generating profit is the top priority for each
company
, they would make an effort to conduct
research
 more quickly and more efficiently.
For example
, a
company
, like Teva has been carrying out extensive
research
 to solve generic drug problem and
then
 provide them for patients.
This
 can lower out-of-pocket costs to patients. The
second
, by investing in
research
 fields of companies will relieve the burden on the government’s budget.
As a result
, the authorities would
also
 have more cash to spend on other main areas including accommodation, health and medical services and particularly education which leads to improvement in the quality of life of the whole community. In inclusion, I believe that both government and BBB private companies should be involved in
research
 activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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