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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
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In most capitalist countries on earth, some private schools are significantly renowned for their quality of
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.
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, it cannot be denied that
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 owned educational facilities are important as well. In fact, the
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education
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 system cannot only provide more opportunities to low
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involving social as well as economic factors
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also maintain
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 a higher concentration on students.
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, it’s my strong believe that parents who send their children to private institutions need to pay taxes to support public schools.
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, students who are and are not studying in public school are all benefited from the public
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 system. Unlike the private company whose purpose is to generate financial benefits,
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 educational schools and university aim on students themselves.
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 means all the funds will be invested in facilities, teacher’s salary and research into students’ study. The results of
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 are many great teaching methods which will help students learn better.
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, public schools provide opportunity and literacy to children who live in poverty. An enormous number of pupils would struggle with illiteracy if there was no public school. Studious poor children will have opportunities to
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to gain with effort
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 higher
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. Not to mention the fact that higher national literacy rate means people can reach more healthy knowledge and can manage themselves to avoid bad behaviours,
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 as using methamphetamine and committing crimes.
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 will help improve the society, which in turn benefits people who pay taxes. I do appreciate that many people are paying much money to earn their children a good
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, which guarantees a bright future for their heirs.
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, their duty of paying taxes to support
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education
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 system still has to be completed. Without
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, opportunities are limited and crime rate might be higher and
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 bad effects would come
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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