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Some people prefer to spend more time improving their careers. Others think that it’s more important to spend time with family and friends. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the United States, a host of employees wants to change the times working in the company from five a week down to four days a week no matter how many incomes they will be received since wanting to spend more time with the family.
However
, it is proof that
this
 scheme is
uunreliable
liable to be erroneous or misleading
unreliable
 several backward, which going to be shown below.
Firstly
, reducing the time at work for each worker in the companies is truly hard as it's required businesses to find others who can replace a lot of
vacancy
Suggestion
vacant
 positions.
Therefore
, there is a huge amount of money could be taken to train entrants,
this
 could be a waste for every company.
Moreover
, the more workers they get, the more spaces and enhanced technology is required include computers, working tables. Futility can cut into business profits and the shortest way lead to bankruptcy.
Secondly
, in the case, the companies meet their worker's needs and carry out the plan, they might raise the expectation to
works
Suggestion
work
 and required more quality with the aim to fulfil all the tasks which should be completed in a week into four days. If any economic depression happens, a mass of employees will have to face the risk of losing their own job. In a management position which required working five days, changing the hours at work seems impossible. In conclusion, the option of a four-day workweek is still a huge wonder for businesses as there are still existing a lot of hidden problems that can not be resolved in a short time
Submitted by masaki suda on

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