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The internet has brought about many changes into our day to day life. Nowadays we are doing things such as mailing, contacting, banking and communication much faster. Do these developments have more advantages than disadvantages?

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The
internet
 provides various advantages for the rapidly developing country
such
 as facilitated e-learning system and online shopping. Even though there are some disadvantages
such
 as lack of security system for institutional documents as well as lack of privacy by using social media. E-learning is a very efficient method of the study system because students can focus their studies rather than attending the virtual classes. Undoubtedly can say it is more beneficial for students who are travelling long distance from far away to attend their classes. Non other than that, it is very cost effective because they have to spend more money for their face to face classes and travelling as well. Due to the e-learning facility traffic congestion will be reduced. When we consider few advantages, mainly, banks and institutions are under threatened by hackers where they can trace the details of customers and documents of institutions. Another drawback is majority affect the society by influence of social media where some people are spoiling their life by misusing social media.
Finally I
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Finally, I
 can say that the
internet
 is providing that enormous help to the society. My suggestion is to people can get immense advantages of the
internet
 rather than using it in an improper way. In my conclusion is using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 in a correct way will minimise the problem among the society.Awareness messages and programme should be conducted among the people to reduce the complications.
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