Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day and in their free time and have a health problem as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Indeed,

exercise

is necessary for a healthy

body

and a sound mind. But, nowadays some people do not consider its value in their daily

life

routine. Specially working class who spent most of their

time

offices

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offices, therefore

therefore

they cannot manage to spare some

time

for

exercise

or any other physical activity.

As a result

dire health consequences

Suggestion

the dire health consequences

can affect the

body

longer

Suggestion

the long

run. There can be many reasons of not having an

exercise

daily basis but

Suggestion

a daily basis, but

a daily basis but

it has been noticed that people who have busy routine and spent most of their

time

in offices they normally not manage to go for

exercise

. Having a busy schedule is not only a reason for

this

. Staying and work continuously

Infront

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In front

of computers make the

body

and mind

tierd

depleted of strength or energy

tired

Therefore

this

work culture makes a person lazy and habitual of

this

routine.

This

continuous

routine

Suggestion

routine, then becomes

routine then becomes

then

become living culture and people never think to get

involve

Suggestion

involved

in any kind of physical activity or do

exercise

even on weekends or during holidays. Not having any physical activity makes a

body

dull and bulky. To eradicate

this

problem it

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problem, it

is recommended to schedule your day with a proper timetable.

Likewise

, we always spare our

time

for lunch, dinner and breakfast.

Similarly

, there must be some specific

time

in a day for

exercise

too. Early morning walk before to start a day or after the dinner can be

consider

Suggestion

considered

as a start.

Further

, gyms can

also

be helpful to motivate a person

for

Suggestion

exercise

. Instructors play a great role to push a person to achieve

such

healthy routine.

Moreover

, as in gyms, an individual is liable to follow

timngs

the time when something happens

timings

which allow them to schedule their

life

and routine in

timely manner

Suggestion

a timely manner

. In conclusion,

refers to the speaker or writer

would say

exercise

should be a part of everyday routine. It remains a mind and

body

fresh.

Thus everyone

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Thus, everyone

should develop their

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

such

a way that promotes a healthy

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

325 words

4.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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