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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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How much funds should be allocated to the private schools, or, whether they should be funded at all, has been debated for long. There are many who believe that the private schools are only profit-making institutions, and, can sustain themselves with the huge fee they take from the students. They are,
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, not eligible for
government
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 funding. In my opinion, private schools should be provided funding but not to run their system. The whole intention of private schools is that their quality of
education
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 is way ahead of what the public schools provide, and,
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 the reason they charge
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 high tuition fee. It is argued that, mostly the people who can afford
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 high
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 costs, are anyway, in a better position to fund their wards’
education
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, so there is no need for the
government
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 to fund them.
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, I do believe, that irrespective
of what school the
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of what the school
 children study at, the
government
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 should take
initiative
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the initiative
initiatives
 to promote talent.
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 of providing funds to the private schools, the
government
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 can start different initiatives.
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, they can fund 25% seats, for the talented and bright children that come from disadvantaged situations, but, need encouragement.
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 initiatives will not only build the private school brand, but,
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 help
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 students benefit from the quality of
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 that the private schools provide. The funding can
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 be made available in the form of scholarships to support higher
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.The private schools should aim at creating an inclusive strategy, where the children from all backgrounds can learn and grow together. With
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 strategy, if they approach the
government
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, I am positive that they will get the required funding.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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