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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
Smoking is injurious to
health
, which will impact public who inhales the smoke due to that the government has passed the law to avoid the smoking in public places. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and provide my views. Smoking can cause the lung diseases, by damaging the airways of the lung. Apart from
this
, it can cause more
health
 diseases
such
 as cancer and abdomen illness. When a person smokes in public places like in front of shops and parks will affect the people whoever inhales the smoke.
Moreover
, those people will get more
health
 problems, due to that many countries have been prohibited the smoking in public areas, which will help the people and their family members.
However
, some people are not following the policies, which end up with heavy fines or prison for a few years to disregard the rules. Nowadays, in the shopping malls, universities and corporate companies are providing the specific zone for smoking, so that people who are willing to smoke,
then
 they should utilize the allotted areas.
For instance
, a person uses the particular zone, which provides privacy and it is the time for relaxing.
In addition
, it will reduce or prevent other people from
health
 issues. Everyone has their own responsibility to protect their family members, neighbours and community, so that they should obey the law and orders. To conclude, the system of rules is created to protect the public, so people have to accept the order from the government, which would really helpful for everyone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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