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Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

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Some people think that grandparents should spend their time with children and grandchildren
However
, others opinion is that they live independently. In
this
 essay I would like to discuss about views of both the people
in addition
 to my feeling regarding
this
. Many people who are getting old wants to live with children and grandchildren,
furthermore
 their child
also
 thinks the same. Old people throughout their life sacrifice for the sake of children. At the end they want to spend their time with sons, daughters and grandchildren for their inner happiness
Moreover
 they find the same. Old couple becomes single when their partner dies, at that situation children are the most valuable medicine for them. At their ending some have health problems, that time they need a family, that will bring them to normal Person. There is another type of category who thinks that elderly people should live their own.
Such
 type of people doesn't want relations, but money. They take all money and property belongs to their parents and leave them in old age homes
In addition
 to
this
 they didn't care about them. Some leave their parents if their health is ruined,
for example
, if an old one getting I'll, their children have no interest in spending money and
finally
 they send them to warehouses.
Finally grand parents
Accept comma addition
Finally, grand parents
Finally grandparents
 want to live with their sons and daughters for happiness. In my opinion they should live with their children only, I think, that the only way to respect them and giving respect to their age.
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