Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

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Recently, many
people
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have accepted
to do extreme activities, the ones have many risks
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in
their
life
and they might lose their
life
in their way. There are many activities like
this
such
as mountain climbing, hang-gliding, zip-lining, and skiing in high mountains. Sometimes these people go to places no one ever gone there. When these people are interviewed and they
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about the reason they are so interested in these activities, they answer that they really enjoy doing in spite of the difficulties the face with. Most of them have a big goal that they try their best to achieve like reaching to the peak of Everest. They do many
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exercises
and even spend a lot of time and money to achieve that.
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to the joy of reaching their purpose they enjoy passing the way to the final destination. According to their view,
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another
reason they do these risky activities are the extreme excitement they feel while doing them and the discharge of adrenaline in their body and
also
the feeling of confidence after
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successfully
passing the trend and reaching the desirable level. In my opinion, nothing is better than having a goal in
life
and try and fight to achieve that. I think
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of
these people the quality of
life
matters more than
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its
quantity. They rather to do what they like even risky in their
life
and they don't care that maybe they lose their lives. They are ready to risk their lives to live the
life
they like rather living for a long time without risking their lives and dreaming about their wishes for the rest of the
life
without any attempt to make them real.
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  • Adrenaline rush
  • Thrill-seeking
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishment
  • Resilience
  • Risk management
  • Social recognition
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Endorphins
  • Fatality
  • Risk assessment
  • Cultural phenomenon
  • Recklessness
  • Safety precautions
  • Extreme sports
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