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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often thought and many debates are still being going that certain prisoners should made to work for the people without any payment. The criminals should not be just to put them behind the bars but they should
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 punish be punished to serve the community. The person who violates the rules and regulations of the country should be punish to work for the people. In
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 way a criminal will have a courage to provide service to the people and he would not do that crime again. By
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 it not only beneficial to people, but
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 government too. The government will not have to pay the wages to other people and worked
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 the violate can do
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 some disadvantages that the prisoners could run from that place or they can plan to do so which would be very dangerous for the people. But the government has to take some responsibilities and should make some precautions to safeguard the society. I would recommend that the prisoners should not only be punished but
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 they should work for the community so that they spend their time in servicing people rather than just to waste their lives behind the jail.
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