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These days, more and more people are goiung to other countries for significant period of time, either to find job or to study. there are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

My take of
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 is that
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 could be an advantages or it
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 can be a disadvantage
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 different kind of reasons and it can be challenging after all the country were you headed to can make it easy and can make it difficult but absloutley it will be challenging because you are moving to another country a total different culture
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 possibly a different religions people so you may get along and you may not. let,s take an example a man who is forced to travel and be like a refugee to the United States and he is originally from the middle east with no english and a muslim man with his family they are moving there seeking for a fair and a healthy qulity of life the obstacles he will be facing basiclly he is not speaking english
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 to that he has a family which harder to move in a group
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 of one person
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 he needed to watch out his behviors and his kids on top of that the father will have to find a job As soon As Possible to provide his own family a good life and let us not forget that he is musilm and he is in a non musilm country he may face some kind of racism. Fourthermore, the whole family of his are still a refugees they could wait significant period of time, to collect all the necessary papers so they can be legaliy legally living and working anyway he will make alot of money than before he will be learning a new language even childerns will be in a native english speaking schools and they still younger they will probably as fast as light sound too many advantages I bet it deserves to immigrant.

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task response
Plan a short intro that clearly states what you will talk about, then end with a simple conclusion.
structure
Organize the ideas in three parts: benefits, downsides, and a short wrap up. Use a new paragraph for each part.
coherence
Use clear linking words to show order and connect ideas, like and, but, also, however.
language
Keep the spelling simple and correct. If you are unsure, write slowly and check.
examples
Give one clear example and explain it simply to show your point.
content
Stay on task and avoid extra ideas that are not about life and work in a new country.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides of the issue.
content
A real life example is given to show the idea.
structure
The choice to talk about life and work in a new land is clear.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broaden one’s perspective
  • enhance personal growth
  • cognitive abilities
  • cultural understanding
  • unique experiences
  • professional and social network
  • language barriers
  • financial strain
  • culture shock
  • homesickness
  • legal and bureaucratic hurdles
  • cumbersome
  • stressful
  • expatriates
  • discrimination
  • xenophobia
  • integration
  • local community
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