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The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
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The chart gives information about UK
immigration
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,
emigration
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 and net
migration
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 between 1999 and 2008. Both
immigration
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 and
emigration
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 rates rose over the period shown, but the figures for
immigration
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 were significantly higher. Net
migration
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 peaked in 2004 and 2007. In 1999, over 450,000
people
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 came to live in the UK,
while
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 the number of
people
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 who emigrated stood at just under 300,000. The figure for net
migration
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 was around 160,000, and it remained at a similar level until 2003. From 1999 to 2004, the
immigration
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 rate rose by nearly 150,000
people
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, but there was a much smaller rise in
emigration
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. Net
migration
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 peaked at almost 250,000
people
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 in 2004. After 2004, the rate of
immigration
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 remained high, but the number of
people
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 emigrating fluctuated.
Emigration
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 fell suddenly in 2007, before peaking at about 420,000
people
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 in 2008.
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, the net
migration
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 figure rose to around 240,000 in 2007
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 but fell back to around 160,000 in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigration, emigration, migration, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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