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The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
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The chart gives information about UK
immigration
,
emigration
 and net
migration
 between 1999 and 2008. Both
immigration
 and
emigration
 rates rose over the period shown, but the figures for
immigration
 were significantly higher. Net
migration
 peaked in 2004 and 2007. In 1999, over 450,000
people
 came to live in the UK,
while
 the number of
people
 who emigrated stood at just under 300,000. The figure for net
migration
 was around 160,000, and it remained at a similar level until 2003. From 1999 to 2004, the
immigration
 rate rose by nearly 150,000
people
, but there was a much smaller rise in
emigration
. Net
migration
 peaked at almost 250,000
people
 in 2004. After 2004, the rate of
immigration
 remained high, but the number of
people
 emigrating fluctuated.
Emigration
 fell suddenly in 2007, before peaking at about 420,000
people
 in 2008.
As a result
, the net
migration
 figure rose to around 240,000 in 2007
,
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 but fell back to around 160,000 in 2008.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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