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Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experiences

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Since
career
 is very
fundemental
serving as an essential component
fundamental
fundamentals
 to people
nowdays
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now days
 in order to earn more money and raise their economy
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 There are more and more people spend most of their
time
 in
workspace
 and staying away from home only for their
career
 purpose
.
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.
Although
 it is believed that spend more
time
 in
workspace
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the workspace
a workspace
 will give a lot of benefit
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,
 there
are
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is
also
 a serious impact of disadvantages that must be considered
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 As people
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are competing each other to raise their income
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,
 working hour will absolutely
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the result of their
hardwork
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hard work
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The reason why people like to spend more
time
 in
workspace
 is because it will be a perfect choice to concentrate to their
career
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,
 while there are no disruption from others
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 As for working
time especially
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time, especially
 for employees who even sacrifice their leisure
time
 and work till late night
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,
 it will help them to get more chance of getting
promotion
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promoted
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,
 while it will
also
 raise the income for the company
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However
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,
 behind these
hardwork
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,
 there
are
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is
 something that might be
sacrifice
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sacrificed
,
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,
such
 as family
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 When employees or employers are working more
time
 in
workspace
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the workspace
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,
 there will be less
time
 spent for
family
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the family
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,
 as it will loosen the bond in the family
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 The other disadvantages
is
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are
 about
workers
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workers'
worker
 health
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,
 because of them working late night constantly
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,
 it will give more chance to get some unwanted illness
such
 as heart
attact
launch an attack or assault on; begin hostilities or start warfare with
attack
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,
 obesity and many more
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 In conclusion
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,
 people may work more to raise their life economy
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,
 somehow
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,
 they need to arrange their working schedule
diciplinely
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 so they can concentrate seriously on their
career
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 but not risking family and their own health
.
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.
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