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The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

#purpose #businesses #money
Nowadays, lots of companies are encouraged in established by the governments to promote international
business
. There is an
opinon
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
 that people who doing
business
 should focus on the
profit
 and
that is
 the only thing they need to concentrate.
Nevertheless I
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Nevertheless, I
 partly agree with that belief. On one hand, making money is a
hugh
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
 motivation for people to
working
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work
, especially while there are many stresses
pressure
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pressures
 on the staffs.
Also
 numerous companies
have been go
Suggestion
have been going
have been gone
 out of
business
 because they could not balance their finance. Eventually,
that is
imposible
not capable of occurring or being accomplished or dealt with
impossible
 to maintain a
business
 without
profit
, even a
charity
Suggestion
charitable
 organization still need money from various
source
Suggestion
sources
.
On the other hand
, ethics and personnel are important as well as the
profit
. A
business
 could not be successful while selling poor quality products with high
prize
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
 or using producing process that harm the environment. Consumers will not select that
products
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product
.
Also
 the quality of staff should be concentrated too. If the employees feel happy with their works, productivity will be much better. In conclusion,
profit
 is very
important but
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important, but
 it is not the only thing which
make
Suggestion
makes
 a
business
 sustainable. One successful
business
need
Suggestion
needs
 to harmonise between
profit
an other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
features
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feature
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial sustainability
  • Profit margin
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Stakeholder
  • Socio-economic impact
  • Ethical business practices
  • Customer retention
  • Brand loyalty
  • Workforce morale
  • Innovation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Competitive edge
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