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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Colleges ought to allow the same amount of men and women, regardless the
subject
 they will pick. In
this
 essay I will discuss why I agree with the statement above.
To begin
 with, we must underline the fact that in the past, females had always been culturally discriminated by a sexist society dominated by men: historical events has shown us how they were undoubtedly considered as the "weaker sex".
As a result
, females were not allowed to attend any university, and their only task was to take care of the family, whereas all the responsibilities were carried by males. For
this
 reason, these days there still is a "social gap" between the two sexes.
However
, both in the past and nowadays, girls have shown their ability to manage the toughest challenges, even better than boys.
Hence
, every
subject
 should be equally open to everyone.
Firstly
, these days' females are not as denigrated as in the past. In fact, as soon as they had been given access to universities, more and more women are covering important roles in their area of expertise once ruled by men
such
 as management, politics, and economics.
For instance
, the German Chancellor Angela Merkel, is considered one of the most powerful people in the world.
Secondly
, even though some people think that some subjects might not be considered "appropriate" for women, e.g. Aerospace engineer (a must-have degree
to
Suggestion
for
 everyone who dreams to become an astronaut), it has been proven the opposite.
For example
, the astronaut Samanta Cristoforetti, is the
first
 Italian woman to travel to space.
This
 demonstrates what women are capable of, and why there should not be any numerical restriction applied by universities in any
subject
. In conclusion, I believe that females have the skills to compete with males equally, and because of that there should be a fair distribution of both sexes for each
subject
 without exceptions.
Submitted by Luca Rossi on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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