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Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say that they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Violence media
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Media Violence
 and video games have been always a prolonged controversial subject,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 that, the amount of cruelty in
main stream
the prevailing current of thought
mainstream
 movies and computerized games that have scenes of verbal of physical brutality, has been growing steadily over the past 20 years, which dramatically affected
on
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by
 social and people
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
. A large group of researchers and academics stated that, there is a consistent relation between violent movies or video games, and the increase in aggressive
behavior
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 and aggressive cognitions,
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 a notable decrease in pro-social
behavior
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, empathy and sensitivity to aggression, which I totally agreed with, specially the negative effect on children. Evidence shows that
this
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 can be detrimental to young children; as they are still developing perceptions and expectations about the world around them. These views are strongly influenced by their daily experiences. If children are often exposed to scenes of
violence
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, they may develop a deformed perception of
violence
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 and its actual frequency in real life,
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 they might become more antisocial and emotionally distressed.
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on
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On
 the other hand, others are claiming that these movies and games are not detrimental.
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also
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Also
, that exposure to
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violence
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violent
 media may have a short-term
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
, but there is just no evidence linking that to long-term consequence of crime or actual violent
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 In conclusion, exposure to
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violence
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violent
 media or video games have a negative effect on social and people’s
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
these
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These
 types of media and games should be closely monitored, identified and even panned if necessary. Parents have a
grate
a person who has achieved distinction and honor in some field
great
 responsibility and must closely
monitoring
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monitor
 children’s media usage.
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