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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied process diagram depicts how the wave-energy
machine
 works and where it is located. As
an
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overall
,
engine
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 is working with the help of the
waves
 on the seashore. The design of
this
 wave-energy
machine
 has two chambers that are one chamber is related to the
waves
,
another
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and another
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 one
with
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 turbines and
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a generator
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generator
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.
Initially
, the process commences from the
waves
 and the water levels
increases
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.
On
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 the bottom
chamber
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 air gathers and flows through the turbine.
At
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 the
last
 stage.
While
 turbines rotate the energy generates
from
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by
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electricity
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the electricity
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 generator.
Furthermore
, the location of the
wave - energy
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wave-energy
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 apparatus is determined by wave power. There are 2 locations for setting up
this
machine
. . If from the coastline,
then
 larger
waves
 and more power
produced
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are produced
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as well as
 higher cost
needed
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are needed
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 to construct.
Otherwise
, nearer the
machine
 located from the coastline, that will make small
waves
 and cheaper to build even though electrical power would
smaller
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be smaller
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 to produce.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, waves with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 7 times.
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