Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those relate to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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a group
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of
people
’s opinion tourists ought to respect
local
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cultures
and rituals of
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dweller’s tourist destination. Some
people
,
however
, are
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and believe tourist destinations should accept various
cultures
. In my opinion, local culture and rituals should be followed by
visitors
, preserve both national culture and identity for
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generation,
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prevent cultural
clashes
Two important factors that
visitors
should consider are local customs and behavior so as to avoid cultural
clashes
and so do I .there are so many specific rituals in some countries have been followed by their dwellers for several years. So tourists should try to respect local
cultures
in order to prevent some issues that might ruin their trips completely.
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in Islamic countries wearing Hijab is an inseparable part of
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women’s life, so if females want to go to these countries as a tourist might be better to wear Hijab in the same way to avoid cultural
clashes
,
further
following the local customs not only does preserve national identity but it
also
leads to transfer these pure
cultures
to next generation and save them for a long time
on the other hand
welcoming cultural difference with open arms attracts
visitors
across the world . indeed there is a positive correlation between numbers of tourists and revenue which are earned by local
people
, so more income provides
people
with better social status ,
furthermore
local populace become familiar with various
cultures
and have
this
chance to broaden their horizon and pick up positive aspects of tourists’
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in order to tackle their issues in tough circumstance and turn into those happy
people
who always have
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approach to life and climb the ladder of success in succession In conclusion,
while
people
enjoy different opinions, personally I think
visitors
ought to respect local
cultures
and
behaviors
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in order to prevent cultural
clashes
might spoil their trips completely
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
preserve local
cultures
for next generation
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